Hi Maria, I like the use of negative space in the corners but how they are now feels like a waste of space. Maybe the silhouette can be more like the shape of the banana, instead of just an oval shape. I'm also not too sure about the typeface you used for "banana" up top. It seems a little random since you don't use it anywhere else so maybe you should change it or find other places to use it. I do like your other typeface selection, the script one, and the swirls up top follow that same design so they all fit nicely together.
Maria - this has some great design/typography work in it, and I would encourage you to think of this as part of a 2 page spread... the other page being a full bleed beautiful photo of crepes on a plate. It will then truly be a page in a cook book. I suspect you can find one on Thinkstock that will work well with the colors in this design. Add a folio to the page(s) and you will have a more comprehensive, and less school-oriented, project.
Yes, I agree with Amanda about the busyness at the top of the page behind the header versus the negative space in the corners. However, you could think about reducing the busyness in the header instead of filling up the negative space in the corners. Sometimes that approach can work well for a design that seems to have too much happening in some places, and not enough in others. Less is more!
I wonder if you "show" us a silhouette of bananas (which are easily recognizable) instead telling us with a word "Bananas" it might relax the design up there a bit. On the other hand, the juxtaposition of the roughness of "Bananas" with the elegance of the script is an interesting one - consider the type of communication that you have created with the pairing of these 2 very different typography styles. Is it what you want? It might be, based on what I see in your color palette and swirls in the background. I think it helps this design speak to a younger, less sophisticated audience than the script font alone would not do. So... don't give this up easily!
More importantly, in my mind, is that the 2nd word in the heading appears to be tracked too wide... introducing too much space between the letters of the word Crepes. Why not simply increase the pt size of that word, and pull the letters back together again? I think it will be more readable, and typographically correct... script fonts don't easily pull apart since their connection lines are there for actual, or visual, connection between letters.
I enjoy the light-hearted circular swirls in the background.. and it adds a crepe-like shape to the design. I wonder if you'd want to do the same at the bottom? Would this activate the corners down there?
The very last word at the bottom is styled with a stroke. The only place this style is used... so you might want to reconsider that approach... I usually feel that a designer should not make a significant change, or introduce a brand new approach, on the last page, or on the last element, of a design. It tends to visually "start" something new - just as the project is ending.
I love your typography like what did you with crepes, filling, and sauce, It beautifully done. I was wondering maybe you make the body text a little smaller so it doesn't feel so busy like what you did for crepe's body paragraph.
Hi Maria, I like the use of negative space in the corners but how they are now feels like a waste of space. Maybe the silhouette can be more like the shape of the banana, instead of just an oval shape. I'm also not too sure about the typeface you used for "banana" up top. It seems a little random since you don't use it anywhere else so maybe you should change it or find other places to use it. I do like your other typeface selection, the script one, and the swirls up top follow that same design so they all fit nicely together.
ReplyDeleteMaria - this has some great design/typography work in it, and I would encourage you to think of this as part of a 2 page spread... the other page being a full bleed beautiful photo of crepes on a plate. It will then truly be a page in a cook book. I suspect you can find one on Thinkstock that will work well with the colors in this design. Add a folio to the page(s) and you will have a more comprehensive, and less school-oriented, project.
ReplyDeleteYes, I agree with Amanda about the busyness at the top of the page behind the header versus the negative space in the corners. However, you could think about reducing the busyness in the header instead of filling up the negative space in the corners. Sometimes that approach can work well for a design that seems to have too much happening in some places, and not enough in others. Less is more!
I wonder if you "show" us a silhouette of bananas (which are easily recognizable) instead telling us with a word "Bananas" it might relax the design up there a bit. On the other hand, the juxtaposition of the roughness of "Bananas" with the elegance of the script is an interesting one - consider the type of communication that you have created with the pairing of these 2 very different typography styles. Is it what you want? It might be, based on what I see in your color palette and swirls in the background. I think it helps this design speak to a younger, less sophisticated audience than the script font alone would not do. So... don't give this up easily!
More importantly, in my mind, is that the 2nd word in the heading appears to be tracked too wide... introducing too much space between the letters of the word Crepes. Why not simply increase the pt size of that word, and pull the letters back together again? I think it will be more readable, and typographically correct... script fonts don't easily pull apart since their connection lines are there for actual, or visual, connection between letters.
I enjoy the light-hearted circular swirls in the background.. and it adds a crepe-like shape to the design. I wonder if you'd want to do the same at the bottom? Would this activate the corners down there?
The very last word at the bottom is styled with a stroke. The only place this style is used... so you might want to reconsider that approach... I usually feel that a designer should not make a significant change, or introduce a brand new approach, on the last page, or on the last element, of a design. It tends to visually "start" something new - just as the project is ending.
I love your typography like what did you with crepes, filling, and sauce, It beautifully done. I was wondering maybe you make the body text a little smaller so it doesn't feel so busy like what you did for crepe's body paragraph.
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