Maria, As I read this I notice, right away, some grammar issues in the headings. So - you need to have someone proof this. If you print this out, and hand it to me in class, I'll proof it for you.
If this is a 2 page spread, there is a production issue in the little white type that sits at top directly in the middle of the 2 pages. It would be sitting in the gutter - no can do. Even if this was a center spread, so the same piece of paper was simply folded and stapled down the middle, it really must move to another location. OR it could be placed in 2 columns, on either side of the gutter and very carefully "jumps" the gutter as the last line on page 1 brings us over to the first line of page 2.
I notice an area at bottom of page 1, the circle with the white triangle in the middle. I wonder if this area might work for this block of type? You are pulling our eyes down to the this little white triangle circled in purple... but I'm not sure why. So... maybe adding the text to this area would help make sense of the visual hierarchy you have already established.
You mention axial grid... but this really doesn't use an axial grid. There are some angles in the background... but the text does not sit on an axial grid. So - best not to mention this when showing the piece. Google "axial grid" images and you'll see lots of examples of how to use that type of grid with typography. I recommend it, but I'm not sure it would work here... maybe it would. I leave that to you.
I was wondering maybe you can get rid of some of the text. it seems a little busy, for me my eyes goes from New Evil up to the quotation mark then the orange text. The text look cool because it reminds me of streams of data but if you want people to read i think some spacing is required.
I think you can make new face "of" the same color as new face. you already have lot of cool design element some unifying some them wouldn't be bad
Hi Maria, I love this design. Great use of geometric shapes and working with a grid. My suggestions are to figure out more of a strict color palette. The quote is where my eye is drawn to first because it is the only text in white and is centered on the page and I don't think that is intended to be the focal point. I suggest making that text there smaller and using a different color. Also, the title is the only thing that is that is that nice orange-y color. But then the subheads are green. I would suggest making all of that unified by choosing one color for all of those. But overall, I love the design of this and think you did an awesome job.
Maria,
ReplyDeleteAs I read this I notice, right away, some grammar issues in the headings. So - you need to have someone proof this. If you print this out, and hand it to me in class, I'll proof it for you.
If this is a 2 page spread, there is a production issue in the little white type that sits at top directly in the middle of the 2 pages. It would be sitting in the gutter - no can do. Even if this was a center spread, so the same piece of paper was simply folded and stapled down the middle, it really must move to another location. OR it could be placed in 2 columns, on either side of the gutter and very carefully "jumps" the gutter as the last line on page 1 brings us over to the first line of page 2.
I notice an area at bottom of page 1, the circle with the white triangle in the middle. I wonder if this area might work for this block of type? You are pulling our eyes down to the this little white triangle circled in purple... but I'm not sure why. So... maybe adding the text to this area would help make sense of the visual hierarchy you have already established.
You mention axial grid... but this really doesn't use an axial grid. There are some angles in the background... but the text does not sit on an axial grid. So - best not to mention this when showing the piece. Google "axial grid" images and you'll see lots of examples of how to use that type of grid with typography. I recommend it, but I'm not sure it would work here... maybe it would. I leave that to you.
I was wondering maybe you can get rid of some of the text. it seems a little busy, for me my eyes goes from New Evil up to the quotation mark then the orange text. The text look cool because it reminds me of streams of data but if you want people to read i think some spacing is required.
ReplyDeleteI think you can make new face "of" the same color as new face. you already have lot of cool design element some unifying some them wouldn't be bad
Hi Maria,
ReplyDeleteI love this design. Great use of geometric shapes and working with a grid. My suggestions are to figure out more of a strict color palette. The quote is where my eye is drawn to first because it is the only text in white and is centered on the page and I don't think that is intended to be the focal point. I suggest making that text there smaller and using a different color. Also, the title is the only thing that is that is that nice orange-y color. But then the subheads are green. I would suggest making all of that unified by choosing one color for all of those. But overall, I love the design of this and think you did an awesome job.